Outside

Before setting off Richard steadied himself on his newly acquired, makeshift legs. His eyes fixed on the big double door at the end of the corridor, he propelled himself forward, lurching from one step to the other. Three or four steps - that was all he could muster without resting. Stop and start, like a little baby falteringly reaching out for his mother's outstretched hands, before starting all over again. Yet, there was no mother now, not even a nurse. This was his battle and he would have to wrestle with it alone.

With each pause, his eyes lignered over the maze of doors that littered the corridor on both sides. So many anonymous fates were being played out away from his subtle gaze. And somewhere was Sonya. He knew he should... but his courage failed him.

He struggled on, his eyes riveted to the doors in front of him. He was going to make it. He had to make it. Just a few more steps now, and as he struggled forward, the ward doors transformed themselves into the doors of that magic wardrobe, the one he had so often read about as a child - the doors to a wonderfully magical world. He straightened himself up, his step quickened and he thrust himself through the doors. Yet, the world he was entering was something far removed from the magical world of Narnia. It was the harsh world of reality that had sent him to the clinic in the first place.

10 comments:

A nice, brief glance into a man's struggle or at least that's the impression I get.

23 August 2007 at 15:42  

this is a courageous man who tries to stand up from the misfortunes of life. i just felt though that the story was cut too short. but it's probably just me.

23 August 2007 at 18:03  

We all have to face harsh reality at one time or other. I did not think it ended abruptly. But then I like such endings which leave open ends.

23 August 2007 at 18:24  

Yet, there was no mother now, not even a nurse. This was his battle and he would have to wrestle with it alone.

I so understand that--not in the sense of literally being able to walk but in the metaphorical real sense of re-anchoring an adult life

Enjoy isn't a word I would use for this but I loved it

23 August 2007 at 18:42  

It was the harsh world of reality that had sent him to the clinic in the first place.

Love that part... brings the story full circle for me.

23 August 2007 at 23:36  

His courage failed him, but he thrust himself...loved this story.

24 August 2007 at 04:52  

i love the sense of hope in his seeing the doors to the clinic as the doors to the wardrobe. (great literary reference, btw!)

24 August 2007 at 20:28  

The ending is heartrending.

25 August 2007 at 16:47  

I really liked the first paragraph, and how you described his struggle, having only himself to rely on.

25 August 2007 at 21:55  

I really like the sense in this of new beginnings in a world that hasn't changed for the better. This story is dramatic and powerful, yet also vulnerable and poignant. Really nice!

29 August 2007 at 07:14  

Newer Post Older Post Home

Blogger Template by Blogcrowds