Praise

It was meant to be the third and last time: a triangle of love and joy. Joel hobbled out onto the hotel terrace and looked at the fuming clouds above him. The film of feelings linking him to the behemoth churned away deep within. He saw his wife pulling him up that last little rock, his body vibrant with elation as the two stood on the summit holding his wooden leg high above his head. The repeat performance with his son, much harder with the passing years; the smiles and arms wound around each other as sang out the praises of the creator with all their heart. The music still hummed in his ears. And...

But no, no 'and'. That most cherished of pictures was the one that never was; almost replaced by the one most feared. Joel shuddered. His enthusiasm, her reticence.

"I want this more than anything else."

"I know Dad, but we want to get back down."

It had been a lucky escape. Just a few inches more... He turned his away eyes. As he went back into the room he saw her tranquil body asleep beneath the sheets and muttered a heartfelt thanks to that self-same creator.

8 comments:

an interesting take.. good use of the words...

5 May 2010 at 20:49  

interesting tale. great visual but I think I would have liked a little more. :)

6 May 2010 at 00:55  

Visual, emotional writing. Nice take on the prompt.

6 May 2010 at 02:10  

Very good -- I like how you used the words!

6 May 2010 at 03:12  

amazing how our minds churn wildily and another so close sleeps peacefully....

6 May 2010 at 20:34  

Ah, very nicely done...

7 May 2010 at 04:37  

I feel like 'one more believer' said it best. Him and his wife, them and the volcano.

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